托福作文 Movies and television have more negative effects than positive

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  WritersForMe 组长 楼主 2019-09-23 22:19:27

  Lin Qiu September 9, 2019 at 1:57 pm Score: 62.5 Many sentences exceed 20 words, so please split or shorten these sentences. Additionally, there is a large number of passive sentences, so convert them into their active counterparts. I will send you screenshots to illustrate errors/problems in relation to your essay. Regards, Lin Qiu

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  WritersForMe 组长 楼主 2019-09-23 22:19:44

  li University: Renmin University of China Nationality: Chinese September 13, 2019 at 12:24 am Movies and television are popular ways of entertainment among people in modern society. But in my eyes, they have more negative effects than positive effects on young people’s behavior. First of all, the fighting scene in movies and television teach young people how to act violently. For example, young people tend to imitate big heroes’ motion, through which they hit their enemies with great power. According to a psychological research conducted in the 1970s, the frequency of young people’s fight is higher in the region where violent movies are more popular. Apparently, violent films and television lead young people to be aggressive. Second, some young people may imitate the cool but dangerous tricks played in the movies or television, which may make them injured. Many cool behaviors shown on the screen are hazardous, like playing fireworks or driving fast. However, most of the films and TV program will not remind the audience that these behaviors are under strict guidance. In this case, young people who are easy to be attracted by these cool tricks and imitate them are in great danger. Recently, a girl in China followed a television program to make a popcorn bomb herself. Unfortunately, she was severely hurt when the bomb exploded and passed away five days later. Third, some characters in movies and television may break the law or treat others cruelly, but the movies or TV program just pose emphasis on their bravery and strength. As a result, young people do not realize the characters’ mistakes and cannot recognize their own illegal behaviors in real life. For example, there are some movies describing killers. In the movies, the killers are incredibly calm and brave, although they kill others arbitrary. Young people who watch the films may admire the killers’ excellent skills but neglect the fact that they are committing a crime. Consequently, these young people may also grab the gun and kill people around them. In a word, violent, dangerous and illegal action are widely accepted in movies and television. Therefore, they have negative impacts on the way young people behave.

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  WritersForMe 组长 楼主 2019-09-23 22:21:00

  Lin Qiu September 18, 2019 at 2:34 am Score: 63.3 I will send you screenshots to illustrate the problems/issues. Regards, Lin Qiu

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  WritersForMe 组长 楼主 2019-09-23 22:21:10

  li University: Renmin University of China Nationality: Chinese September 18, 2019 at 12:22 pm <span lang=”EN-US” style=”font-family: ‘Helvetica’,sans-serif; color: #45494d;”>Movies and television are popular ways of entertainment among people in modern society. But in my eyes, they have more negative effects than positive effects on young people’s behavior.</span> <span lang=”EN-US” style=”font-family: ‘Helvetica’,sans-serif; color: #45494d;”>First of all, the fighting scene in movies and television teach young people how to act violently. For example, young people tend to imitate big heroes’ motion, through which they hit their enemies hard. According to a research conducted in the 1970s, the frequency of young people’s fight is higher in the region where violent movies are more popular. We can see that, violent films and television lead young people to be aggressive.</span> <span lang=”EN-US” style=”font-family: ‘Helvetica’,sans-serif; color: #45494d;”>Second, some young people may imitate the eye-catching but dangerous tricks played in the movies or television, which may make them injured. Many cool behaviors shown on the screen are hazardous, like playing fireworks or driving fast. However, most of the films and TV program will not remind the audience that these behaviors are under strict guidance. In this case, young people who are easy to be attracted by these cool tricks and imitate them are in great danger. Recently, a girl in China followed a television program to make a popcorn bomb herself. Unfortunately, she was severely hurt when the bomb exploded and passed away five days later.</span> <span lang=”EN-US” style=”font-family: ‘Helvetica’,sans-serif; color: #45494d;”>Third, some characters in movies and television may break the law or go against the ethics, but the films or TV program only pose emphasis on their bravery and strength. As a result, young people cannot realize the illegal or unethical behaviors both on the screen and in their own life. For example, young people may not realize how cruel killers are from the movies about killers. In the movies, the killers are incredibly calm and brave, although they kill others arbitrarily. Young audience may admire the killers’ excellent skills but neglect the fact that they are committing a crime. Consequently, these young people may also grab the gun and kill people around them.</span> <span lang=”EN-US” style=”font-family: ‘Helvetica’,sans-serif; color: #45494d;”>In a word, violent, dangerous and illegal behaviors are widely accepted in movies and television. Therefore, they have negative impacts on the way young people behave.</span>

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