留学超强硬件申牛剑，一篇PS拒门外

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  Gus Goodman (公众号：九牛问津) 楼主 2019-09-03 14:08:37

  主体第二段 My excellent performance is not only demonstrated in theoretical study but also in lab practice. I spend most of my spare time in the laboratory in debugging laboratory apparatus or calculating experiment data. I conducted independent research, for instance, the design of X. I was enrolled in the X of China, participating in the research on X system. Based on my research projects, I have completed 4 papers, which were accepted by A, B, C, D, respectively. Also, an English paper will be submitted to E before X. Besides, another paper about X has been submitted to F. Recently, I am concentrated on a paper about X via X method. 结尾段 I do want to pursue my doctoral studies at the University of Oxford. Oxford, well known for its spirit of creativity, excellence of academic atmosphere and the diversity in culture, will provide me a better prospected environment in scientific research, where I can grow successfully to be an expert in the field of X. In Oxford, I will get the chance of learning from the most reputable professors and acquainting myself with elites from the whole world. In my postgraduate period, I hope to make more progress in the research and have my papers published in top journals. My dream is to be a university teacher, devoting my whole life in researching for more advanced knowledge and imparting my knowledge to more students. Thus, after doctoral studies, I want to enter a leading university to start my teaching career and continue with my research projects. 未完待续...... 本文为英国牛津大学【九牛问津】团队原创 (需转载请联系原作者)。团队由9名牛津大学在读硕博生组成，还包括几十名分布于英国 G5及罗素集团学校兼职的优秀硕博生。更多留学内容请关注公号【九牛问津】，个人号：DY_941105。本系列文章旨在正留学三观，输出纯留学干货。

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  Gus Goodman (公众号：九牛问津) 楼主 2019-09-04 10:18:32

  综合评价 整体：整篇为流水账形式，无切入，无过度，无高潮。从reviewer的角度，我无法看出此申请者任何特殊之处；首段：空洞且无说服力，且所提及的professor并未在套磁过程中有任何positive feedback，此处空穴来风为一大忌；主体段：完全是CV的搬运，从GPA到文章发表到奖励，与CV主体内容无异。之前小课堂提过，CV是骨架，PS是血肉。主体段落作为reviewer只能看到骨架；结尾段：没有将short-term goal与Long-term goal紧密联系，未提及从oxford可以得到的实际资源如何助力之后的所有goals，reviewer第一感觉是完全套模板，这里套用任何一个学校都可以用；语言：纯中式思维，全篇基本都是baby language，完全口语化表达；逻辑：西方文化最注重的论证逻辑性完全没有体现，每一段落没有环环紧扣，散落无序。简单来说，就是“我就是很牛逼；我就是很想去牛津”而不是“我为什么很牛逼，哪些论点论据证明我很牛逼；我为什么要来牛津，牛津为什么一定要录取我”。 结语 此学弟research proposal存在同样严重问题，但由于专业定向性较强，此处不予解析。综合PS和RP，作为系里的reviewer，我会直接把他的材料归为C档，连与第二轮申请者同时考虑的机会都不会给。 本文为英国牛津大学【九牛问津】团队原创 (需转载请联系原作者)。团队由9名牛津大学在读硕博生组成，还包括几十名分布于英国 G5及罗素集团学校兼职的优秀硕博生。更多留学内容请关注公号【九牛问津】，个人号：DY_941105。本系列文章旨在正留学三观，输出纯留学干货。

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