144 自我介绍（学员示范篇）
Red 的原文
My name is Wang Yi-yang, and my English name is Red. I come from China, I participate in this work and travel program for many reasons. First of all, I would like to broaden my horizons, to see the world outside and experience the different cultures and customs. Second if I can successfully come to USA and work for a few month, I will get a very valuable oversea experience. This experience will be very helpful for me in the future. Third, as we know, the USA is a very beautiful country, everybody wants to travel there and me too. After I finish my job, I’ll take some time to travel around. I would like to go to Las Vegas and Los Angeles. My friend told me that these two cities are particularly awesome. About my work experience, I used to work in the Apple shop for two summer vacations. That was 2008 and 2009 mainly to introduce and sell Apple products to the customers. Last summer I worked on a music radio, mainly to choose the songs that played on the radio and this summer vacation, I hope that I can work in the USA. That must be cool and interesting. I have a lot of hobbies such like sports especially soccer and reading, movie and music. Well, this is my basic information. I hope to see you soon. Bye-bye.
经过Mr. Wong修改的正确版
My name is Wang Yi-yang, and my English name is Red. I come from China and I am participating in this work and travel program for many reasons. First of all, I would like to broaden my horizons, to see the outside world and experience X different cultures and customs. Second if I can successfully go to the USA and work for a few months, it will be a very valuable overseas experience. This experience will be very helpful for me in the future. Third, as we know, the USA is a very beautiful country and everybody wants to travel there, including myself. After I finish my job, I’ll take some time to travel around. I would like to go to Las Vegas and Los Angeles. My friend told me that these two cities are particularly awesome. About/in regards to my work experience, I worked in the Apple shop for two summer vacations. That was in 2008 and 2009, mainly to introduce and sell Apple products to X customers. Last summer I worked at a radio station, mainly to choose the songs that were played on the radio show. X This summer vacation, I hope that I can work in the USA – that would be cool and interesting. I have a lot of hobbies such as sports, especially soccer. I also enjoy reading, movie and music. Well, this is my basic information. I hope to see you soon. Bye-bye.
总结：
非常清晰的呈现，虽有一些语法的错误但是不影响理解，非常好！
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My name is Wang Yi-yang, and my English name is Red. I come from China, I participate in this work and travel program for many reasons. First of all, I would like to broaden my horizons, to see the world outside and experience the different cultures and customs. Second if I can successfully come to USA and work for a few month, I will get a very valuable oversea experience. This experience will be very helpful for me in the future. Third, as we know, the USA is a very beautiful country, everybody wants to travel there and me too. After I finish my job, I’ll take some time to travel around. I would like to go to Las Vegas and Los Angeles. My friend told me that these two cities are particularly awesome. About my work experience, I used to work in the Apple shop for two summer vacations. That was 2008 and 2009 mainly to introduce and sell Apple products to the customers. Last summer I worked on a music radio, mainly to choose the songs that played on the radio and this summer vacation, I hope that I can work in the USA. That must be cool and interesting. I have a lot of hobbies such like sports especially soccer and reading, movie and music. Well, this is my basic information. I hope to see you soon. Bye-bye.
经过Mr. Wong修改的正确版
My name is Wang Yi-yang, and my English name is Red. I come from China and I am participating in this work and travel program for many reasons. First of all, I would like to broaden my horizons, to see the outside world and experience X different cultures and customs. Second if I can successfully go to the USA and work for a few months, it will be a very valuable overseas experience. This experience will be very helpful for me in the future. Third, as we know, the USA is a very beautiful country and everybody wants to travel there, including myself. After I finish my job, I’ll take some time to travel around. I would like to go to Las Vegas and Los Angeles. My friend told me that these two cities are particularly awesome. About/in regards to my work experience, I worked in the Apple shop for two summer vacations. That was in 2008 and 2009, mainly to introduce and sell Apple products to X customers. Last summer I worked at a radio station, mainly to choose the songs that were played on the radio show. X This summer vacation, I hope that I can work in the USA – that would be cool and interesting. I have a lot of hobbies such as sports, especially soccer. I also enjoy reading, movie and music. Well, this is my basic information. I hope to see you soon. Bye-bye.
总结：
非常清晰的呈现，虽有一些语法的错误但是不影响理解，非常好！
《IEC 国际交流中心》推荐的美国暑期实习计划 －咨询QQ：53582906，网址：http://www.exchangeiec.cn 提及“贵旅特”立减2000元
我们创立的品牌是“贵旅特”，我们对贵旅特（Greeters）的定义就是一群热爱生命，并且用行动来改变世界、提高自己的一群人。
加入我们的行列！请持续关注公众微信账号：贵旅特
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