我写了一个科幻电影剧本，想要投送去剧本黑名单（The Black List）。事实上已经投上去了，并且拿到了只有8.53%的作品能拿到平均分3分（10分为满分），但我并不骄傲。
Sci-Fi Horror,Crime Thriller,Sci-Fi Thriller,Sci-Fi & Fantasy
After a scientist discovers a way to hop between parallel worlds, one of his iterations takes advantage of the technology and frames versions of himself through different worlds for violent crimes.
JAMESES explores the scientific concept of multiverse, which in and of itself is a fascinating topic. The idea of multiple versions of the same person being forced to interact with different iterations of himself is an interesting one, especially when considering how the accident of birth changes each of their personas. By presenting the idea that one small change may influence a huge amount of factors in a man's life, the script raises some fascinating issues conceptually. The script employs interesting psychological layers, like the discussion of sociopaths on page 22, as well as the nod to Nietzsche and the concept of Yuanfen on pages 127 and 130. The different Jameses' thoughts about fate and predestination are also a fascinating scientific and religious debate that is worth further exploring. Though the script struggles with length and clarity, these ideas are certainly compelling and would give Sci-fi fans a lot to discuss.
Though the script's premise is interesting, the story fails to bring together its plot, character, and dialogue elements in a meaningful way. The issue seems to arise primarily from a lack of mastery of the English language. The dialogue often feels like a translation that is hard to understand, like on page 8 when one of the Jameses says, "we all do have no wife," the use of the word "bewilding" on page 22, or when the scientist describes Kate's weeping for her life on page 118. The script's multiple time lines are also confusing, as the jump between times, worlds, and locations is hard to follow. While it is clear how Scientist James first is able to jump through all of the worlds, the explanation of how all the Jameses ended up in one world is incredibly lacking. Didn't Bad James just set them up to be arrested in their individual worlds? How did they all come together in one? The logistics of their prison escape are also unclear. The script also often employs vague action words that leave the reader wondering what the intentions are. Characters are described as making "weird" facial expressions, but this term is not specific enough to direct the story. The scenes also often suffer from feeling repetitive. Characters have the same arguments and the fact tht James breaks into Jenny's wedding twice feels like overkill.
This script struggles for clarity, which is an issue that seems to arise from the story not being in the author's native language. While there are some interesting concepts, the plot is convoluted and difficult to follow. This script would need a rewrite, preferably with the help of an English native, before the story was ready to be seen by producers.